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Apr. 18th, 2005


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Hey all, I figured i'd post a little something here. It's my Sailor Moon fanfic entitled Gem Princesses. For those who don't know about Sailor Moon, that is perfectly fine. In the first 5 parts, the whole Sailor Scout thing is barely mentioned. It is mostly about the main characters' lives before they know they are Sailor Scouts. So please feel free to read and criticize (CONSTRUCTIVELY). I like any kind of feedback if it means I can make my story better. Thank you. And now, for the prologue and Chapter 1 of Gem Princesses. We start with Willow's story!


Part One: Willow's Story


Before I was 12, I never knew about my past. I thought that I was the actual daughter of the two people I had come to know of as parents. But apparently, I was an orphan, and I got adopted. I was very young then and my adoptive parents didn't tell me until I was much older, about 13. But even after that, I still didn't know the entire truth. Then, horrible things happened around my 18th birthday in March and the secrets came out from my mom. But I'm getting ahead of myself. Let me tell my story and the secrets will come to light.

Chapter One- Sadness to…Sadness?

As I walked through my school to my locker, I had this feeling that I always get at the end of the day. It wasn't joy, but sadness and despair. I always dreaded going home. It meant I had to face my overbearing father and his complaints about me being in the chorus. It seemed that he hated my beautiful singing voice. He never went to the concerts even when I was able to sing a whole song solo.

My father always wanted me to be involved in sports, especially softball. He said that I should because I was so muscular. I had a strong body, but I never had been interested in playing sports. I remembered when I used to complain to the gym teachers, the female ones, that I had menstrual cramps and couldn't play. It always worked and I got out for the day.

But now that I was a senior in high school, I didn't need to do Phys. Ed. It was out of my options and I was glad about that. When I reached my locker and started to take off my lock, my friend Katie showed up. "Hey Willow, how's it going?"

"Fine, Katie. Hey, did you take that Trig test today? Wasn't that so hard?" I asked.

" No, of course not. I mean, all you had to do was study a little." She said matter-of-factly.

"Yeah, well, a little may work for you, but it doesn't for me. I tried to study but it just didn't stick.", I said. Katie was very smart and talented. She was on the National Honor Society, It's Academic, and she had performed in several plays at our school. Katie was tall, like me, and had honey blond hair that she kept in a ponytail. She had aquamarine eyes that always looked thoughtful even when she was laughing. She was very beautiful, so beautiful that she had been asked by most of the guys in the school to the prom.

"Oh come on, Willow. All you have to do is apply yourself and you'll do well. Actually, how would you like me to tutor you?"

"Katie, that would be so great." I said happily, "I'll call you tonight, ok? Bye, Katie!" I ran off to the waiting school bus, got on, and sat down in the front. Sitting in the front would help since I'd be getting off on the second stop. The bus got to my stop around 3:30. It was about several blocks to my house. As I walked home, I thought about my upcoming birthday. It was on March 23, a Saturday this year. I planned that my friends and I would go to get some pizza before we went to go see a movie. We'd be going to see that cute movie Ice Princess. Before I knew it, I was right in front of my house and would've gone straight past it thinking about Josh if my mom hadn't been yelling my name. She sounded very frantic and anxious. I wondered what was the matter. I came running to her. "Mom, what's wrong? What's happened?" I asked, panicky now.

"It's your father. He…He's fainted.", she said.

and now, I'm going back to bed. *mutters* stupid cold... *shakes fist*

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Date:April 18th, 2005 08:27 pm (UTC)
*highfives boothy*

I see you've made some changes from the original...

fainted.", she said- "...fainted," she said."

Commas in dialouge if you finish the sentence with "*insert speaker and speaking veb here*" (Sorry. Beaten into me)

Hey! You and Willow have the same B-day! I just noticed that!
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